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Old 05-29-2005, 03:28 AM
___cliff rayman___
 
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Re: Need help with message on business card


gennif@excite.ca wrote:

>What do you think of either of these
>
>Do you enjoy doing your own bookkeeping?
>Does anybody?...
>Bookkeeping Solutions That Make Cents!
>
>

Does not really make cents.

>
>or
>
>Where is bookkeeping ranked on your To-Do List?
>Let us put you #1 on our List.
>
>

The idea is good, but it needs work. Be more direct and less clever.

Is there anything you do better than your competitors? Anything that
makes you different or special?


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